Monday, November 8, 2010
Monday Potluck ~ practical application...
birds of war hover
on metal wings
weighed down with
unspeakable things
incendiary eggs; one
for every two fragile
targets
Dresden Doll - face
baked crystalline on the
wall; umbilicus sailed
through a window,
birth died in the fall
tattered filigree lace,
monument to the
manic moments of war
porcelain slivers
sliced open ruby lips
never again to meet
in a kiss
from inside the
Church on the Hill
'V' for Victory shouts
one man's thrill -
revenge,
decimate Dresden's lace
~ ~
The theme for this week is buildings, landmarks and monuments and I found this poem resting way back in my blog posts and it is about this weeks theme, just from a different point of view.
I wrote this piece after reading HERE, I didn't get very far into the article before this poem was born.
Have a wonderful Potluck writing and reading Monday y'all. ;)
love,
Eaton
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i love how you relate war with the scarring on dresden lace figurines..
ReplyDeleteEaton, man, you melt my face off every time. Too much delish poetry and clever wordplay in here to quote any, except I'll say that 'from inside the Church on the Hill' stanza is pretty darn clever. But some of the imagery further up is just stupefying. Hey look, if you're interested in a group environment in which poets give and receive constructive crit to fast track our learning, I run one. I mention this to those whose poetry has leapt out at me, and those I feel would fit in/benefit/etc. Often the novice poet can't take honest crit, it stings too much if they've invested too much of their ego in it. Personally I much prefer honest feedback. How will I learn if everyone just tells me how good my poetry is all the time?
ReplyDeleteGreat stuff man (the link to the group is on my blogroll (WordSalad WorthClicking))
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my dearest Eaton, you tickle me with your infinite talent here....
ReplyDeleteeggs, birds, churches, wow,
these are divine.
thanks for the support to JP.
keep rocking.
I value your kindess.
xxx
Dear Eaton
ReplyDeletethanks for sharing such a lovely verse... It was a great joy to read your beautiful words...
ॐ नमः शिवाय
Om Namah Shivaya
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ReplyDeleteawards 4 u...
Happy Wednesday.
xxx
great poem. loved the reference to Dresden at the end. excellent job!
ReplyDeleteThanks for sharing this one Eaton- this is so meaningful and Intense.. very well composed.. :)
ReplyDeleteLove xx
I hope that you have enjoyed your participation at our Monday Potluck, we love your talent and appreciate your willingness to share.
ReplyDeleteYou are welcome join us this coming Monday for another week of fun, old poems or poems unrelated to our theme are welcome.
Let me know if you need further assistance.
You Rock!
xoxox
Thank you Olivia, I am enjoying Monday Potluck. I'm enjoying reconnecting with some of my earlier work and hoping to write more in the future. I'm enjoying reading the great talent in the Potluck too.
ReplyDeleteThanks so much for your kind interest.
Thank you to everyone who comes by to read my poetry, you very much appreciated. :))
Dresden's lace captured me from the beginning, with it's fragile beauty shattered and scattered between war and memories and broken lips that will never speak again. How powerful this timely poem, one day after we honored our fallen soldiers, this looks at the mess we left behind; in so doing we see the beauty and fragility of porceline dreams and lace on dolls.
ReplyDeleteWell done, Eaton. Read the article too.
ReplyDeleteYou're a fine poet. Kudos for this piece.